Showing posts with label script. Show all posts
Showing posts with label script. Show all posts

Monday, May 18, 2009

Unbound Captives Script Review

Genre: Period/Western/Civil War
Premise: A woman loses her children to a tribe of Indians and lives every day only to see them again.
About: Back in 2003, Fox offered Stowe $3 million, and later $5 million, for her script, with Ridley Scott poised to direct and Russell Crowe to star. She turned down what was among the highest sums offered a first-time scribe because there was no promise she would be anything more than screenwriter. — The movie will star Hugh Jackman, Rachel Weisz, and Hollywood hotshot Robert Pattinson.
Writer Madeleine Stowe

When I heard that Unbound Captives was a “period piece”, I got excited. I feel like we haven’t had a good period piece in a long time. Braveheart, Titanic, and then…well, I can’t really think of any (suggestions in the comments section please - and no, I don’t count Galdiator as a good period piece). So when I opened it up and realized the period was……… mid-1800s America and it was about Indians, I was really bummed. For me personally, that just isn’t an interesting time in American history. BUT I will say that the one movie I *did* like with Indians was a little movie called Last Of The Mohicans helmed by Director/God Michael Mann, and starring noneother than…you guessed it, Madeleine Stowe, the writer/director of Unbound Captives. For that reason, I was willing to give Captives the benefit of the doubt.

As I trudged through the opening pages, I was starting to feel a lot less benefit and a lot more doubt. Unbound Captives felt a bit like pulling teeth at times. Although there are some exciting moments, films where a bunch of Indians and Americans are shooting at each other seem to blend into a mishmash of cliches for me. It all feels a bit too generic. Now whether this has to do with my predisposition to disliking these kinds of movies or the script itself, I couldn’t really tell you. All I can say is it’s never good when you’re rereading every sentence twice because your mind keeps drifting.

Tom, 30s, is a language-translator between the Indians and the white man. He seems lost, a little bit out there, a man unsure of his place in the world. He travels with Neighbors, a U.S.-Indian ambassador. The two are obviously close friends. They are currently trying to warn a large tribe of Indians that an attack on them by the white man is coming. No sooner is this warning heeded than an assassination attempt on the Indians erupts. Confusion everywhere. No one knows that the white assassin isn’t affiliated with the white ambassadors, causing the Indians to immediately attack every white man in sight.

Though many die, Tom and Neighbors make it out okay, only to come home where Neighbors is quickly murdered the next day (for his affiliation with the Indian people). Tom, who we already know has issues, takes this as a sign to go on a spiritual journey.

This allows us to shift our focus to May, a happy loving mother of two, a boy and a girl. Things aren’t gonna be happy for long though because an Indian tribe raids May’s village, killing all in sight, and taking with them her two children. We find out later that this raid was the direct result of Tom telling the Indians that the white man was coming. The Indians decided to move first. Oops.

As if that weren’t enough, May’s husband ends up the only man killed on some unrelated soldier brigade. Talk about a bad day! As a result, May, just like Tom, pulls away from the world and goes on her own spiritual journey. She spends all her days thinking about her son and daughter. And though a little hope dies each night, she never runs out. She will find her children.

Enter Tommy boy, back from his soul-searching trip and just as bummed about the world as May is. So it’s no wonder they fall in love and get married. But as old secrets creep up, it isn’t long before May finds out that Tom was indirectly responsible for the slaughter of her village and kidnapping of her children. Tom, feeling the heat of the world’s biggest guilt-trip, takes it upon himself to find them, or die trying.

And there you have it my friends. That’s pretty much the plot of Unbound Captives. I have to say that this is a tough one to call. Reading it, I could almost feel the colors. Sense the light. I could hear the sounds. I could smell the air. It’s very cinematically written. But I think it’s cinematically written to a fault, because the key element driving the story - May seeing her children again - drifts in and out as being an active element. Sometimes they’re looking for the children. Other times they’re not. And it’s in those times where they’re not that Unbound Captives just sits there, unsure of what to do with itself.

Occasionally though, even in those slower moments, there is magic. There’s a heartbreaking scene, for example, when May is in her cabin during a cold winter, 7 years removed from the kidnapping, and all she can think about is if her kids are warm or not, wherever they are. It hits you hard. And we can really sense this woman’s pain. And then there are other times, spanning pages and pages, where it feels like absolutely nothing is happening. Yet I understand that there’s a rhythm to this kind of film that requires patience so who knows? Maybe it will all work out in the end. But for me, scriptwise, it was a little too slow and I wasn’t as engaged as I wanted to be. Here’s to hoping the film overcomes that.

What I learned: I think Unbound Captives reminded me that it’s okay to slow down sometimes and let your character experience a moment. There’s so much pressure to keep things moving in a screenplay (I’ve said this before), we forget that some of the best moments happen when your characters are doing just the opposite. There’s a moment where Tom walks up the hill late at night to simply stare at the stars. This reminded me of the scene in Star Wars where Luke walks up the sand dune to take in the dual-sunset. It’s one of the most powerful moments in the film and it’s something we see less and less of these days.

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Wednesday, May 13, 2009

New Moon, Kristen changed her mind

Kristen Stewart nearly didn't even bother auditioning for Twilight.
Kristen didn't think the story was any good.
She told ShockTillYouDrop.com: "I read a synopsis of the story before I read the script or the book 'cause I was working on something else. I just needed to focus. Give me two weeks to finish this movie and I'll read all of these scripts. But they told me it was being cast right at that time and it's a really big deal.
"The synopsis was terrible: "Girl's life changes when she meets the perfect man in a vampire and perilous adventures..." Oh, so there's a completely shallow story. Not exactly a great thing about girls - that they're wholly satisfied and are willing to devote their lives to somebody who's super attractive and can take care of you. Brave when you don't have to be. Bella wears the pants in this relationship.
"I read the script and it completely differs from the synopsis! The power balance is very interesting. You have this guy who should be fine with himself and he hates himself. He's self-loathing and afraid and just being shook up.
"Then Bella, who doesn't know anything about vampires, trusts herself enough to subject herself to anything. She trusts herself to give up power, which is one of the most powerful things you can do. That's why I wanted to do it. It's very character-driven, it's not a big movie."
We are so glad Kristen got the part of Bella Swan because her chemistry with Robert Pattinson is amazing.
We can't wait to see them in New Moon!

Source: myparkmag.co.uk

Monday, May 11, 2009

Leaked Scripts Get Returned, Gets New Moon and Memoirs Premieres

ST. LOUIS (AP) — A St. Louis beauty salon owner accidentally happened upon two of the hottest Hollywood scripts — the pages from the upcoming "Twilight" sequels.

Her decision to turn them over to the studio got her an invitation to the premieres.

Casey Ray spotted the scripts in a trash bin outside an upscale hotel where actors filming a different movie were staying. She considered leaking the scripts to a national tabloid, but decided against it.

Instead, her lawyer, Al Watkins, helped her return them to Summit Entertainment LLC, the studio making the movies.

Watkins says the studio invited Ray to premieres for the vampire films, "New Moon" and "Memoirs," and will certify the scripts as authentic after the movies are released.

There was no immediate comment from the studio.

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Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Memoirs/Remember Me Script and Review

Memoirs/Remember Me Script and Review

Warning : There is spoilers, do not read if you dont want to get spoiled


Memoirs (Remember Me)

Genre: Drama Premise: Two college students who’ve experienced recent loss fall in love and heal their fractured families.

About: Landing on last year's Black List with 6 votes, this was just recently picked up by Summit. Also Rob Pattinson of Twilight fame is attached (for context's sake, I knew none of this while reading the script)

Writer: Will Fetters Memoirs is a strange little script that was pushed on me by one of our readers. She kept saying "You gotta read Memoirs. You gotta read Memoirs." I looked at the 50 or scripts I wanted to read *before* Memoirs and said, "There's no way this is happening." Of course I didn't tell her that.

Well after a long day of reading 4 scripts - yes 4 - I was about to go to sleep when I said, "You know what? I still got something in me. Why not?" (sadly, I really did say this out loud) So I grabbed Memoirs and started reading. After 10 pages, something familiar started creeping over me. I felt like I had read this script before. And it was because I *had* read this script before! I had given it a shot six months ago and absolutely hated it. I never made it past page 20.

It's about a guy Tyler (I envisioned him as a sort of Matt Damon in Good Will Hunting type) who pretty much leads a miserable existence. He's depressed about the world. His father doesn't have time for him. He's got a step-father he doesn't get along with. He's got an 11 year old sister with no friends. His older brother died at the World Trade Center. About the only thing he's got going for him is his friend AIDAN, who is so over-the-top, you feel he's written that way just to compensate for the fact that everybody else is so damn depressing. He's still pretty funny though.

Here's their first scene together, after Tyler wakes up with some random girl...

AIDAN

I sold your girlfriend a toothbrush.

TYLER

You sold my who? ...What?

AIDAN

That voluptuous, delightfully oblivious little blondie you left in your bed this morning... I sold her a toothbrush. Got three bucks.

TYLER

...Congratulations?

AIDAN

Are in order, yes. Because that sale inspired our newest business venture - "The SLUT"

Tyler stares blankly.

AIDAN

The 'Single Lady's Universal Tote'

Tyler stares blankly.

AIDAN

It's the one-night-stand travel pack for women. We throw in some make-up, toiletries, cell phone charger, cab numbers. Retail it at S19.95, maybe do an informercial.

TYLER

And you think women would buy this? With money?

AIDAN

Hey one-night-stands happen... It's a part of life... like stubbing your toe. Sometimes you misjudge a corner and bend back your pinky toe, other times you wake up in a freshman dorm wearing a field hockey tee shirt wondering why your balls smell like cinnamon...

Tyler gives him a peculiar look.

AIDAN

And that's completely hypothetical.

(quickly moving on)

Don't underestimate the novelty gift market. Think about it...instead of giving that token slutty friend a ten-inch black dildo for her birthday, you hook her up with "The SLUT." Everyone has a laugh and the implication that she'll probably use it someday remains. What do you say? Are you in?

TYLER

You need help.

Tyler finishes his cigarette.

AIDAN

OK... fine... be cynical... just remember at some point in history two people had a conversation just like this about the light bulb. One of them went on to fame and fortune and the other one probably went to work at Denny's or something.

TYLER

(smiles)

I'm pretty sure they didn't have Denny's in the 19th century.
A funny scene and yet I had no idea what to think because up until this point, there wasn't a single laugh in the script. Did I miss something? When did this turn into Swingers?

Anyway, Tyler and Aidan get into a late night scuffle with some street thugs that results in a police officer pulling a Rodney King and giving Tyler the beat down. Aidan insists he sue but another opportunity presents itself when Aidan finds out that the officer's daughter, ALLY, attends their college. Aidan insists that fucking over the daughter is the perfect way to get back at the officer.

Tyler's reluctant at first but eventually makes his move. The two begin a relationship and start to fall for each other - the conflict of course being that sooner or later Tyler will have to meet Ally's father and the truth will come out. Although the relationship feels manufactured at first, it eventually finds its rhythm, and you have yourself a cute little story about two people falling for each other despite their respective fucked-up-ness. It's not bad but what bothered me is the misstep it made before the relationship even started.

One thing I don't like is when an important decision is made by someone other than the main character. In this case, Aidan pushes Tyler to date Ally to fuck over the officer. Tyler reluctantly agrees and, of course, later falls for Ally. When the difficult decision comes on how to tell Ally that he knew her father from before, it doesn't have nearly the punch it would've had had Tyler been 100% responsible for starting their relationship. This way it's wishy-washy.

The spot he's in is kinda his fault but kinda not. You never want this. Always have your protagonist driving the story. It makes him stronger and it makes the story stronger. Now up to this point I was thinking, "Why did she want me to read this script so bad? It's just a basic love story." There was nothing about the script that stood out. And then............the ending came.

I am a SUCKER for a good ending. I loved The Sixth Sense. I loved The Others. I love anything that makes me rethink the movie I just saw. For its ending alone, Memoirs gets bumped from a "worth the read" to an "impressive". Even though I'm telling you it's coming, you won't figure it out. Trust me. So don't even try. I'm not even sure it completely fits with the story.

But it's so shocking that you can't help but..........well, run out and tell someone about it. Someone told me. Now I'm telling you. Check out Memoirs. It very well may shock you. :) edit: Lest I mislead you, this script has nothing to do with ghosts. [ ] trash [ ] barely kept my interest [ ] worth the read [x] impressive [ ] genius

What I learned from Memoirs: I said it right at the end of the review. The ending of this script bumped it up from something I probably never would've mentioned to anybody, to something I'm now reviewing on my site and would encourage you to check out. Twist endings are tricky and they're hard to pull off.

But if you have a script idea with a good one, write it, because there's nothing quite like a reader finishing a script and going, "Holy shit." They absolutely have to tell someone. Now! Here's a real-world example for you. The reader who suggested this to me would not leave me alone about it. Talk about the ultimate marketing tool.

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Saturday, April 25, 2009

Just The Facts- The Memoirs/Remember Me Script

Ever since a Hollywood Reporter article mentioned that Rob was considering a project entitled “Memoirs”, people have been searching for information on the movie. The Hollywood Reporter described the project like this:

“Memoirs,” based on an original screenplay by Will Fetters that will be rewritten by Jenny Lumet, who penned “Rachel Getting Married,” tells of two lovers whose new-found relationship is threatened as they struggle to deal with family tragedies.

That’s tempting and interesting, but it’s not a lot to go on. We were going to wait to do this article until we knew for sure Rob had signed for the part, but since the sides are being discussed in various forums, we decided to go ahead.

Pattinson Anonymous are fortunate to know someone who has read the original screenplay for “Memoirs” by Will Fetters and she was willing to provide us with a basic cast list and answer a few questions.

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Wednesday, April 8, 2009

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